Subject: Pirate Positions Registration Sun Apr 12, 2015 6:09 pm
Requirements For Pirate King: UNKNOWN
If your application is denied, you have to wait three days until you can re-apply.
Pirate King: (LOCKED)
Requirements For Yonko(Emperor): +Must have a High influence in the world & A Bounty of at least 400Million.
Perks For Emperors: +Gains 2 Islands in the New World Under That Emperors Control. +Gains 2 Islands in Paradise. + Given significant intelligence network via vast underworld connections.
Yonko - (Garrison D. Lovelett "One Eyed")
Yonko:
Yonko - (Lolly Ze Kandi "The Krystal King")
Yonko:
Yonko - (Symphony Musicka "Rain of Zeus")
Yonko:
Yonko - (Seline J. Whyte "The Beauty")
Yonko:
Requirements to be a Shichibukai(Warlord): + Must be somewhat well known. + Have to have done something absolutely horrible to a Pirate group to have the World Government believe you to be an asset to them.
Shichibukai 1 - (Emilia A. Snow) Shichibukai 2 - (Zarna D. Phoenix)
+Must do something huge for the World government to take interest in you. -Once your bounty exceeds 300million you must give up your position as Super Nova.
Super Nova: (Tymee Alpha) Ranked #1
Tymee Alpha:
Super Nova: (Radley) Ranked #2
'Grill Fist' Radley:
Super Nova: (Kaijo Okinaga) Ranked #3 Super Nova: Heartsmith Ranked #4
Heartsmith:
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Super Nova: (Katie Zareth 'The Butcher'[Level 49]) Ranked #5
Katie Zareth:
Super Nova: (Takuji E. Kaima) Ranked #6 Super Nova: (Phoenix D. Jack) Ranked #7
Phoenix D. Jack:
Super Nova: (Open) Super Nova: (Open) Super Nova: (Open) Super Nova: (Open) Super Nova: (Open)
[b]Crew:[/b] (Name of Crew/ Group/ Or guild. If none put N/A) [b]Position:[/b] (What Position?) [b]Tier:[/b] (What Tier is your character) [b]Activity:[/b] (How active can you be?) [b]Why:[/b] (Why you should have the Position?) [b]Sample:[/b] (500 or more word Sample as you playing as the Position selected)
Patches wrote:
24th September 2016: *All Supernova's tasks now offer 10% bonus on bounty rewards. 24th September 2016: *Top 5 Supernova's tasks now offer 25% bonus on bounty rewards.
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Eden D. Scythe
Position : Supernova Posts : 202 Skill Sheet Skill 1: Ryū Hikō Skill 2: Sora Dōmō Skill 3:
Crew: N/A Position: Supernova Tier: Tier 1 Activity: I can be as active as is necessary for my position. The only times I will be unable to post is when I would be out on military business, which I would of course inform staff of ahead of time and make sure all my current topics at the time are completed before I leave for those periods of time. Why: I have RP'ed for a total of 14 years, and I pride myself on dedication and being active IC. I love telling stories, and I love developing my character step by step. I have always greatly enjoyed roleplaying, and I 100% doubt I will ever lose that love. Sample:
Eden Loves to Make Love...While Fighting:
After having downed my glass of vodka, I heard a few sets of footsteps coming from behind me. There were two heavy sets, but the third was a bit lighter and the clicks of the heels to the ground were more quickly-occurring. When the footsteps had stopped on the quicker feet, I saw a girl from the corner of my eye; she had long-ish brown hair and she looked to be a bit young. Perhaps about my age, maybe a bit younger. She looked to be carrying a strange sword on her, though I paid no real mind to it for the time being. The girl had caught my last words to the barkeep about the bet we started, and said she wanted to join in. My grin widened a bit more as I stood up and then spoke to the girl.
"Oho~ Looks like I have a little partner to join the festivities I cooked up. Sure, you can join in on the fun, but make sure you don't interfere with my own fun okay, cutie?"
I winked at the girl once with my right eye, and then as I turned my head, 10 nearby pirates dropped to the ground or on tables. I had felt a tingling sensation, almost like a wave of electricity passing through me, and realized it had come from the young girl. Haoshoku Haki... interesting. My eyes then flared red as I ran through to the nearest table of pirates, stepping on a few that were on the floor along the way. I spoke loudly to everyone in the room.
"My name is Eden D. Scythe and I shall take you all on!"
After speaking, I jumped up in the air and threw a hard straight-punch at one of the pirates' face, and as it connected, the face of a devil flashed in front of the pirate's face while I felt the breaking of a jaw against my well-trained fist. The man's body flew from the chair and his body twisted in an unnatural way; then I spun to the left, planting a left heel kick in the face of another pirate that had started to get up from my first attack. His body twisted unnaturally, and his legs smashed into the chair he was sitting in while flying backward into an adjacent table. As my left foot landed back on the ground, I lunged at the remaining pirate, who was about to throw a punch at me. I stepped a little bit to the right in preparation of that punch and then threw my right elbow hard at the side of the guy's neck. I could feel the snapping of it under my elbow while the guy plummeted to the ground without resistance. I giggled devilishly, and then I turned toward the rest of the room, blood already spattered on my warrior dress.
"Surely this isn't the best you pussies can do! I want to get some action, too, you know. I'm dyyying to feel some pain. One of you should go find some of your friends to join in on the fun. I doubt any of you can give me the good time I want."
I wiped some of the blood off my dress and then licked some of it off; my body twitched and I moaned aloud. The remaining pirates looked at me as though I had absolutely lost my mind. In a way, I did, though I couldn't deny that I was having fun. One of the guys at the far end of the tavern ran out, probably to look for stronger opponents for me to have fun with. One of the pirates then jumped away from his chair and backward while pointing at me, as though he had seen a ghost.
"You! You're that girl who's been winnin' all those tournaments! The psycho-bitch Eden D. Scythe!"
Excited enough already, I looked toward the girl who desired to join in my fun. I wondered what she thought of me at the moment. Was she scared? Was she like me and enjoying herself? I was curious, though I wanted to keep taking down the pirates still in the tavern. I spoke aloud to the young girl who was still by the counter.
"Hey cutie~ you can join in as much as you like. It sounds like we'll get to have plenty of fun tonight!"
I then giggled some before shivering and letting out a loud moan, my right hand clutching my dress as I orgasmed; my eyes rolled into the back of my head for a moment at how good it felt. The thought of killing these pirates was almost too much. I couldn't wait any longer... I was a freak for sure, but this nature was what caused me to retrieve the reputation I now had among the Supernova, as well as the rest of the Grand Line. I couldn't help that I enjoyed fighting this much, and it took me so long to understand that I needed to use this side of me if I wanted to push even further than normal. Tonight...was going to be an extreeeemely fun night...
Crew: N/A Position: Supernova Tier: Tier 1 Activity: I can be as active as is necessary for my position. The only times I will be unable to post is when I would be out on military business, which I would of course inform staff of ahead of time and make sure all my current topics at the time are completed before I leave for those periods of time. Why: I have RP'ed for a total of 14 years, and I pride myself on dedication and being active IC. I love telling stories, and I love developing my character step by step. I have always greatly enjoyed roleplaying, and I 100% doubt I will ever lose that love. Sample:
Eden Loves to Make Love...While Fighting:
After having downed my glass of vodka, I heard a few sets of footsteps coming from behind me. There were two heavy sets, but the third was a bit lighter and the clicks of the heels to the ground were more quickly-occurring. When the footsteps had stopped on the quicker feet, I saw a girl from the corner of my eye; she had long-ish brown hair and she looked to be a bit young. Perhaps about my age, maybe a bit younger. She looked to be carrying a strange sword on her, though I paid no real mind to it for the time being. The girl had caught my last words to the barkeep about the bet we started, and said she wanted to join in. My grin widened a bit more as I stood up and then spoke to the girl.
"Oho~ Looks like I have a little partner to join the festivities I cooked up. Sure, you can join in on the fun, but make sure you don't interfere with my own fun okay, cutie?"
I winked at the girl once with my right eye, and then as I turned my head, 10 nearby pirates dropped to the ground or on tables. I had felt a tingling sensation, almost like a wave of electricity passing through me, and realized it had come from the young girl. Haoshoku Haki... interesting. My eyes then flared red as I ran through to the nearest table of pirates, stepping on a few that were on the floor along the way. I spoke loudly to everyone in the room.
"My name is Eden D. Scythe and I shall take you all on!"
After speaking, I jumped up in the air and threw a hard straight-punch at one of the pirates' face, and as it connected, the face of a devil flashed in front of the pirate's face while I felt the breaking of a jaw against my well-trained fist. The man's body flew from the chair and his body twisted in an unnatural way; then I spun to the left, planting a left heel kick in the face of another pirate that had started to get up from my first attack. His body twisted unnaturally, and his legs smashed into the chair he was sitting in while flying backward into an adjacent table. As my left foot landed back on the ground, I lunged at the remaining pirate, who was about to throw a punch at me. I stepped a little bit to the right in preparation of that punch and then threw my right elbow hard at the side of the guy's neck. I could feel the snapping of it under my elbow while the guy plummeted to the ground without resistance. I giggled devilishly, and then I turned toward the rest of the room, blood already spattered on my warrior dress.
"Surely this isn't the best you pussies can do! I want to get some action, too, you know. I'm dyyying to feel some pain. One of you should go find some of your friends to join in on the fun. I doubt any of you can give me the good time I want."
I wiped some of the blood off my dress and then licked some of it off; my body twitched and I moaned aloud. The remaining pirates looked at me as though I had absolutely lost my mind. In a way, I did, though I couldn't deny that I was having fun. One of the guys at the far end of the tavern ran out, probably to look for stronger opponents for me to have fun with. One of the pirates then jumped away from his chair and backward while pointing at me, as though he had seen a ghost.
"You! You're that girl who's been winnin' all those tournaments! The psycho-bitch Eden D. Scythe!"
Excited enough already, I looked toward the girl who desired to join in my fun. I wondered what she thought of me at the moment. Was she scared? Was she like me and enjoying herself? I was curious, though I wanted to keep taking down the pirates still in the tavern. I spoke aloud to the young girl who was still by the counter.
"Hey cutie~ you can join in as much as you like. It sounds like we'll get to have plenty of fun tonight!"
I then giggled some before shivering and letting out a loud moan, my right hand clutching my dress as I orgasmed; my eyes rolled into the back of my head for a moment at how good it felt. The thought of killing these pirates was almost too much. I couldn't wait any longer... I was a freak for sure, but this nature was what caused me to retrieve the reputation I now had among the Supernova, as well as the rest of the Grand Line. I couldn't help that I enjoyed fighting this much, and it took me so long to understand that I needed to use this side of me if I wanted to push even further than normal. Tonight...was going to be an extreeeemely fun night...
Word Count: 862
Lucky Wilshire
Position : Vice Admiral Berries : 23,080,000 Posts : 352
I know it's already approved, but do you think, at least in the future, you could be a bit less sexually explicit in your RPing. I'm fine with alluding to it, and I get the sado-maso vibe you're going for,but it might make others (myself included) a bit uncomfortable, that's all.
Eden D. Scythe
Position : Supernova Posts : 202 Skill Sheet Skill 1: Ryū Hikō Skill 2: Sora Dōmō Skill 3:
I understand, and I will be careful, according to who I RP with. As the forum does not have a designated rating for the time being there is no per-say "permanent cap" on the content allowed in RP before it must be placed in a spoiler and labeled.
Again, I understand your point, and it for now will be decided case-by-case. In this sample I RP'ed as my character, by utilizing her personality combined with the occupation previously made.
In accordance with the new rules on approving positions which is stated in THIS ANNOUNCEMENT, I have come to give the second determination on whether or not your application for the Supernova position is adequate. And, in my opinion? It is. The RP sample is of above-average quality in my book, enough that despite the brevity of the sample it still gives a good amount of detail on the actions of her character.
The reaction towards her character's actions are briefly referenced, and the majority of the consequences occur in reaction to her offensive motions, but the overall view on what's going on is enough. The focus on your character is particularly strong, but not enough to go beyond mere opinion. If I was to give this a rating, personally I'd put it at 67/100, which is more than enough for a Supernova. A major blow on my opinion is a result of the combined first person view and present-tense writing. They're typically difficult to work with and looked down upon, but I believe this sample was enough to overcome that.
As for the other details, for the time being I think they're fairly negligible, so I won't make any comments on them and whether or not they've swayed my decision. At the end of the day, I'm giving my second approval to finalise your position as a Supernova. Concerning the additional bounty and gained levels? For the likes of a Supernova, they seem appropriate, and I'll express no qualms on that subject.
EDIT: In regards to what Lucky said, personally I don't have a problem with it. In the rules, it is explicitly stated the rules concerning adult-content, as quoted here: Please also keep sexual actions to a minimum or do them in the designated sections. Now, that being said, in the case of this RP Sample? I actually find her more sensual descriptions such as the moaning fine. As it turns out, as described by the RP Sample, that's more or less the personality of Eden's character. To take away such a central quality to her--a judgement based on how large the focus on these sensual moments are and the foreshadowing of that mental state--would basically take away from the character itself. So long as it doesn't cross the threshold of PG-13, in my book you're all good; however, it certainly is good to relay some prudence in your posts from hereon out, and watch out for how far you go. In regards to the orgasm and brief ahegao, it's better to reference and imply what happened through vague and suggestive wording; explicitly stating out sexual terms is borderline.
Eden D. Scythe
Position : Supernova Posts : 202 Skill Sheet Skill 1: Ryū Hikō Skill 2: Sora Dōmō Skill 3:
For the sexual content, I am normally fairly vague, and if a line is stepped past, I always enclose the post in a spoiler and label it with a "Mature" rating. I try to be as professional as possible when I RP.
As for the first-person point of view, this is simply how I prefer to write. It allows me to be more in tune with the character I have made and it allows me to write in more detail. In the past, I have attempted to use third-person, but it doesn't give me the same kind of feeling as first-person. Due to my already being quite tired, I did not focus much on every detail. This will become more clear in current-time topics, missions, etc.
Thank you very much for your insight. Although it did sting a little that I got a 67/100, it was understandable considering I was not as thorough as I could have been.
And just as well, thank you for allowing me to take up a position as a Supernova. I look forward to making some noise IC!
EDIT: Fixed a couple grammar errors that were bugging me. xD
Lucky Wilshire
Position : Vice Admiral Berries : 23,080,000 Posts : 352
"In regards to the orgasm and brief ahegao, it's better to reference and imply what happened through vague and suggestive wording; explicitly stating out sexual terms is borderline."
This was my only qualm, really. I'm sorry I was being too general. I did not have any issue with the writing as a whole and I would also consider you a talented writer. Admittedly my official opinion has no stake in your position or approval now, I just wanted to be clear that I was not against your style or character, only that small section. Sorry for the confusion, good job. And thank you for your input and clarity, Laplace
Crew: Not yet, but it's in creation Position: Supernova Tier: 1 Activity: I'm active, and I can still be with this position. I can't really say exactly my activity, but I can indeed be here at least once a day (with some exceptions like family vacations, finals, etc of course) Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. Sample:
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"Is that really him? Is that really Chimpanji?" People whispered things like that as he walked threw town. He didn't think about that before getting some supplies for the ship before setting sale again. He didn't like that attention, and even if there weren't many marines near, he had to hide somehow. He moved to a little alley, and when he got there, he shifted forms to transform into his full human form. He had shaggy brown hair and green eyes. What was awesome about his fruit, was that nobody knew about this forms, if they saw this normal brown haired guy, they would just ignore him, he was nothing but another normal human. Hiroko, in his full human point, walked outside the alley. "This should be enough." He told himself referring to his disguise. He was the chef in his crew, and that's why he was the one in charge of buying the food for the crew. Though, he had his subordinates to help him carry everything.
He was just checking around the market, looking for some fruit first. He saw some apples and went towards the man in his little table with his apples. "Amm, I'll take some if you don't mind." The man listened to Hiroko's petition and quickly took a little bag. "Oh sure sir, how many do you want?" Hiroko looked at some boxes behind the man, each box full of apples to sell. "How much will it cost to take all of those apples behind you." Hiroko pointed at the three boxes. The man was a bit confused. "Amm... are you sure you want all of those?" He asked. "Yea, actually, I'll give you all this in exchange." He gave the man a bad with lots of money. The bag was full and it was full of coins, it maybe weighted around 8 kilograms with nothing but valuable coins. He didn't even know how much was that, but he offered plenty of money, even more than the apple's actual price. The apple man changed his expression for a brighter one, a very happy face covered him. "Oh, yea, this is enough." He said as he saw the money inside. "How will you take them?" Hiroko laughed at this comment. "Don't worry, I'll send someone later, just don't sell them please.
Hiroko then turned around and walked again. There were many places with many fruit and other things. He did like bananas as a normal monkey, but he preferred apples. He kept moving, but he wasn't convinced with what he saw, he had this strange sixth sense to pick good food, and if he didn't feel like buying those products, it was because his crew deserved something better.
The sun was just rising, not even half of the day had passed, but it was enough for Hiroko. He was tired ad just wanted to rest a while, even if he only found some apples that day, he didn't need much anyway. He usually used fish to cook, and he got that alone, but that wasn't it, he had someone to get food for the crew, he only went for his apples and for no one else.
Didn't know if it was necessary a fighting rp sample, but I prefer this kind of rp
Phoenix D. Jack
Position : 4th:Supernova Berries : 15,700,000 Posts : 57
Activity: I can be on atleast once everyday, though thursdays evenings I'm out in a club playing games, so at those days I'll only be on early in the day. Though early for me is night time for most of the people on here, I should be able to reply to every thread I'd have active though.
Why: I've got a couple of reasons why I want this, I'm a decent roleplayer, and by now I've got a good hang of the world we're playing in. I've been a roleplayer for about 7 years, of that time I've spent 2 years in the one piece world. Most importantly I love to roleplay, make stories and make each and every person I play with feel like they're doing something special that they are special, meaning I'll mainly be focusing on playing with others, since if you ask me that's the only real good use and reason to take a position would be to make others experience awesome.
Sample:
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It was late in the evening, the town's stores was closing down gradually through town, the activity moving from the working places, to the only places still open at this time, the bars, hotels and restaurants, which was the usual thing, by now people was either returning to their respective place, the folk of the town was returning home while the travelers was moving out to these bars and restaurants, some were just heading right over to the hotel and into their beds. It was now the Marines docked weary from the travel their captain went straight out to find some food letting her crew take care of docking the ship, noting they were dismissed for the evening after they were done. This woman's name was Tessa Rose, Captain Tessa Rose that is known to the world for her impressive rank climb though ask her and she'll tell you she was just lucky. Now while she was looking for a place to eat she heard whispers of this amazing cook traveler who was asked to cook for them for the evening. Her eyes glinted and she quickly found her way to the restaurant, and ordered whatever this mysterious cook recommended.
It was here Jack had chosen to reside for the evening, doing what he loves cook, and boy what a master piece he was able to produce, having spent so much time at sea, he had forgotten just how much of an advantage you could get from having a landfast kitchen, they were able to use much more refined gear, gear he was able to utilize in ways that made the regular cooks stare the awe. Of course the staff had recognized him the moment he had set foot in the door, though instead of shunning him, not that they would dare do that, they knew he was an amazing cook, so they had took up the courage to ask if he'd give them a show, and well Jack was never good at turning down an opportunity to cook so he agreed. As soon as the Marine captain sat a foot inside the door, a waiter made haste back out into the kitchen, looking terrified. "Mr.. Jack, problems, a marine captain just set foot inside our establishment", he was gasping for air, though Jack seemed not the least frightened, he simply continued to work the dishes. "So? Marines eat too you know?" He spoke with a coy voice, smiling happily, though the waiter wasn't the least bit more calm after those words. "But Mr.. Its Captain Tessa Rose" That only made Jack smile even more, putting down the pan, grabbing a new, starting on another dish, one of his specialties. "We best not disappoint her then, tell her I'll prepare her something special" The waiter stood there at a loss for words, not certain if he even heard the right thing, though it seemed like Jack was too busy to care anymore, so he quickly hurried out and served the captain showing her a table which she could sit at. "Our temporary cook told me to tell you fine captain that he'd prepare something special for you"
Tessa seemed shocked at first, though nodded, sat back and waited. It would take too long before the dish was complete, as the waiter returned with the dish eyes were on it, the smell of curry flowed into the entire establishment, making people mouths wet, the staff was silent while watching the man, place down the plate before the captain. Tessa took in the dish before her, it was a rather simple dish chicken curry, raising an eyebrow, seemingly at a loss for words. She waved the waiter away, quickly moved away, though he only moved away to glance back as the woman took her first bite, her eyes widening and she calls the waiter back after sinking her bite. "I need to see the cook, NOW!" Her voice startled the entire place, now all eyes was on them, the waiter bowing hurrying out into the kitchen.
As he got out there, Jack had already put down the flames in the stoves and was washing his hands, smiling to the waiter. "Don't tell me, 'she wants to see me'" The waiter frightened and nodding clearing his throat trying to speak. "She was specifically saying, she wanted to see you now" Jack dried of his hands, and then went over placing a hand on the waiters shoulder giving him a smile, though it would seem the waiter was fearing for his life, just what kind of scorn would they face now that the marines know they had a pirate cook for them, though to be fair no law said they had to deliver any pirates should they show up, of course he didn't know that. Then Jack strolled out from the kitchen, quickly scanning the room, his eyes meeting the captains, who's eyes widened as she rose to her feet. "Alright people, best listen up, the restaurant is closed from effect of immediately, so get away from here and take some distance." The crowd obviously not listening well as only a few people were getting up from their seats, moving for the exit, the staff was ofcourse was getting out knowing full well things was getting heated. Jack's arms flared up in flames grabbing the remaining people's attention. "I wasn't asking, get out right NOW!" His flames getting stronger on the last word, now people was getting a move on, running for the exit. Both Jack and the captains gaze never left the others, as if they were having a starring contest, to see who drew first, the captain's hand resting on the hiltof her sword, watching Jack closely. When they were finally alone, Jack had a teasing smile on his lips, his eyes leaving hers to her dish. "Couldn't even enjoy the dish before calling me out huh, and here I went though so much effort~" His voice was soft, friendly to say the least, though they were both just waiting for everyone to leave the place, when there only were a few left those nosy curious types who couldn't leave such an opportunity behind, though Jack didn't want them close, so activating conquers haki to swiftly knock them out, once that was done they could both sense no one was close to them anymore, as soon as that was clear both their expression became much more friendly. "I felt like having company~" She chuckled lightly, which Jack simply nodded to moving over to the counter grabbing some wine and two glasses, moving over to the captain table taking a seat along side her. "Its good to see you Rosie, I don't like doing these acts~" He sighed lightly, filling up a glass for both, handing Tessa her glass, before taking a sip of his own. Tessa taking a seat and starting to enjoy her food. "I know... But you know it'd ruin my career if anyone knew..." Jack looked sad, nodding knowing full well that it'd be considered traitorous to fratanize with a pirate, though Jack had in most cases been misunderstood, and Tessa knew that, so therefore she could never get herself to bring him in, especially not since he saved her life once. "You're lucky that I like you, I wouldn't go through so much trouble for just anyone you know~" They both laughed, and spent the rest of the evening talking, and well enjoying each others company.
Lucky Wilshire
Position : Vice Admiral Berries : 23,080,000 Posts : 352
Hiroko, I have some suggestions for you. For the sake of a fluid role playing experience, proper spelling and sentence structure are very important. There were a number of times my reading would be tripped up by an easily remedied spelling error, or possibly a redundant statement. My main recommendation here is to take your time when writing, read over it several times before posting, you may even run it by someone to see what they think (I often do that just to get another opinion). I think this could make your writing a bit smoother. Also, for paragraphs, you may want to start a new paragraph when someone speaks; I have always found that it makes a section much less cluttered and gives a sense of importance to what is being said (and colour coordinating speakers simplifies conversations as well). You may want to fill out a paragraph a bit more before moving onto the next one too(there were some pretty tiny ones).
As for actual content, I understand the appreciation for minor events like grocery shopping (someone's got to do it, right?), but they need something special about them to draw the reader's attention. A small conflict to resolve or an unexpected twist. Perhaps the shop-keep is cheating you with a bad price and you stealthily transform and steal a few with your tail or something like that. I felt the most interesting element, your Zoan transformation, was glossed over too quickly. You could describe the hair growth, what it feels like to grow and lose a tail: does the process hurt? Are you bones breaking and regenerating each time? Does it tickle like fairy dust in your nose? We want to know what this incredible process feels like to your character, as if we were experiencing it. I think the most fascinating thing in the One Piece world is the supernatural elements; it certainly couldn't hurt to flesh those out a bit more.
With all this in mind I regretfully cannot approve your request for a Supernova position. Where this is an important and infamous title I feel it needs a more detailed sample. Possibly with some of the suggestions I made. I encourage you to try again, given some time. I have faith you can do it. You have an interesting character with a lot of potential. I look forward to seeing it take form.
Oh well, this is my second try. How about this? Crew: Not yet, but it's in creation Position: Supernova Tier: 1 Activity: I'm active, and I can still be with this position. I can't really say exactly my activity, but I can indeed be here at least once a day (with some exceptions like family vacations, finals, etc of course) Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. Sample:
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The sunny day wasn't actually helping Hiroko with his training. He suffered below the burning sun as he stood with nothing but his tale on a huge stone. His feet couldn't touch the ground, and his concentration was almost enough to ignore the pain this training could put on him. He had his eyes closed to try to focus and think about absolutely nothing, trying to take his mind to a black state where nothing else mattered, that was the real training he had to do. Once each year, he left his crew to go to his home, a little island where no human lived except for a few monks who had raised Hiroko as their child.
"I see you've become stronger Hiroko. But you can't still focus enough, I think we both now that. You'll never be able to enter the Sage state this way, you have to concentrate more."
The one talking was Hiroko's adoptive father, Master Isuma. He was a very old monk who had lived in that little island for about 58 years already. He was bald and had yellow eyes. His body had a strong complexion. He wore a orange robe and nothing else. His training as a sage was complete and it was now time to teach Hiroko this technique. The sage techniques were based around focusing enough to control your whole body and taking this control to a spiritual level, where the physical world wasn't something important and only each ones aura could collide with someone's else. That was the sage mode. The old man walked towards the 5 meters high boulder Hiroko was sitting on, and after touching it with his finger, the rock cracked leaving nothing but a thin stone pole where Hiroko cold barely hold on from.
"You must focus with each move. Each sound around your being must be witnessed by your self. You must hear what I say, apply it and never fall from that stone you sit on. You are anyway sitting on a huge boulder, it's not something complicated for someone to do."
The monk touched the pole once more and cracked it a bit, the stone started to break until it was nothing but Hiroko's balance which kept him from falling. Hiroko had been sitting with nothing but his tale for about 5 hours already and he wasn't allowed to use his devil fruit abilities to make his tale stronger. It was the pain what he was suppose to ignore. It was just a matter of time though before he finally fell from the pole and landed on the ground creating a huge dust cloud around him. The monk sighed after this and slowly turned around giving Hiroko his back.
"Uh... I'm sorry Isu-San, it's too difficult for me."
Isuma knew it was difficult, Hiroko was only 9 years old. Isuma in another hand, learned this technique in about 45 years of painful daily training. Hiroko just trained like that for about 3 years before leaving his homeland and only training about 1 month a year. It was a miracle for Hiroko to actually be able to concentrate the way he did and Isuma knew that, it was just something he couldn't admit in front of Hiroko. The monkey was a bit easy to trick, and telling him that he was something special would give him a huge light which wouldn't guide him, but blind his way.
"I told you not to call me like that Hiroko. And I can see you aren't ready yet, let's try something else to train you. You'll have to fight me."
The old man turned around and took of his orange cloth leaving nothing but a white sort of underwear. His muscles could be better seen like that. Isuma started to focus in a strange position, bending both knees a bit, and sticking his elbows to his waist. His body literally started to turn blue. His veins started to take a strange blue color and his aura could be felt even by Hiroko. This wasn't something a normal human could do. After a few seconds, his eyes also turned blue. He then stood normal and faced Hiroko with the palm of his hand pointing at his monkey child.
"I won't hold back, so you must attack me as fiercely as you can... Actually... I'll let you hit me once, just to let you see the real power of this technique."
The man changed his position to a normal one. He just stood with both arms relaxed and facing the ground. Hiroko knew the man was serious, and without thinking twice, he dashed towards the old man to land a powerful kick. Hiroko dashed about 5 meters in blink of an eye and threw a punch towards the man in front of him. The punch landed directly in the man's stomach, but he didn't move. Instead, a powerful force moved from the blow, cracking the lifeless ground below them in a area of about 5 meters. The old man looked down since he was now taller than Hiroko, and landed a strong punch at Hiroko's stomach. At first, Hiroko didn't even move, the attack was a spiritual punch able to damage Hiroko's spirit instead of his physical body. After a few seconds, Hiroko fell to the ground without being able to move.
"You have to focus Hiroko, focus."
Isuma took Hiroko from his neck and elevated his weak body. Isuma then threw Hiroko 10 meters away from his position, aiming directly to a stone wall and cracking it with no real effort. Hiroko landed on the ground on his 4 extremities to be able to hold on. He slowly stood up and saw the man in front of him. This technique was indeed powerful, and Hiroko wanted to release it.
"I'll do my best Isu-San! I can do this!"
Hiroko shouted with the strength he had left from the mighty blow. And a fe seconds later, facing down with his 4 extremities holding his body, his eyes started to turn blue until they gained a very strong color. He looked up, and in a matter of seconds, his strength was recovered. He stood again like nothing had happened, that was the first stage of the sage mode. The monk changed his expression for a huge smile, and a few moments after that, Hiroko dashed in a blink of an eye to the monks position trying to land a punch. The monk knew this attack could maybe deal some damage to him, so he instead blocked it with his hand. The blow was strong enough to create a crater below them. Hiroko attempted another attack by swiftly moving his leg trying to kick the old man's left arm, the one in it's normal position. Just before the attack landed, the monk disappeared, and without even being able to see the attack, Hiroko was attacked from above, throwing him to the ground and smashing him against the already made crater. His blue eyes changed again to his normal eyes, the sage mode was finishing, and Hiroko was losing his conscience.
"You did well, this is another huge step to mastering the technique."
The monk was now in his normal form, and it was everything Hiroko could see before he closed his eyes and fell asleep. His body was highly damaged. He had been training a lot, and he had finally gotten to open the first stage of his new technique. The one which would give him the power to be recognized by the world and take his captain for glory and power.
Oh well, this is my second try. How about this? Crew: Not yet, but it's in creation Position: Supernova Tier: 1 Activity: I'm active, and I can still be with this position. I can't really say exactly my activity, but I can indeed be here at least once a day (with some exceptions like family vacations, finals, etc of course) Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. Sample:
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The sunny day wasn't actually helping Hiroko with his training. He suffered below the burning sun as he stood with nothing but his tale on a huge stone. His feet couldn't touch the ground, and his concentration was almost enough to ignore the pain this training could put on him. He had his eyes closed to try to focus and think about absolutely nothing, trying to take his mind to a black state where nothing else mattered, that was the real training he had to do. Once each year, he left his crew to go to his home, a little island where no human lived except for a few monks who had raised Hiroko as their child.
"I see you've become stronger Hiroko. But you can't still focus enough, I think we both now that. You'll never be able to enter the Sage state this way, you have to concentrate more."
The one talking was Hiroko's adoptive father, Master Isuma. He was a very old monk who had lived in that little island for about 58 years already. He was bald and had yellow eyes. His body had a strong complexion. He wore a orange robe and nothing else. His training as a sage was complete and it was now time to teach Hiroko this technique. The sage techniques were based around focusing enough to control your whole body and taking this control to a spiritual level, where the physical world wasn't something important and only each ones aura could collide with someone's else. That was the sage mode. The old man walked towards the 5 meters high boulder Hiroko was sitting on, and after touching it with his finger, the rock cracked leaving nothing but a thin stone pole where Hiroko cold barely hold on from.
"You must focus with each move. Each sound around your being must be witnessed by your self. You must hear what I say, apply it and never fall from that stone you sit on. You are anyway sitting on a huge boulder, it's not something complicated for someone to do."
The monk touched the pole once more and cracked it a bit, the stone started to break until it was nothing but Hiroko's balance which kept him from falling. Hiroko had been sitting with nothing but his tale for about 5 hours already and he wasn't allowed to use his devil fruit abilities to make his tale stronger. It was the pain what he was suppose to ignore. It was just a matter of time though before he finally fell from the pole and landed on the ground creating a huge dust cloud around him. The monk sighed after this and slowly turned around giving Hiroko his back.
"Uh... I'm sorry Isu-San, it's too difficult for me."
Isuma knew it was difficult, Hiroko was only 9 years old. Isuma in another hand, learned this technique in about 45 years of painful daily training. Hiroko just trained like that for about 3 years before leaving his homeland and only training about 1 month a year. It was a miracle for Hiroko to actually be able to concentrate the way he did and Isuma knew that, it was just something he couldn't admit in front of Hiroko. The monkey was a bit easy to trick, and telling him that he was something special would give him a huge light which wouldn't guide him, but blind his way.
"I told you not to call me like that Hiroko. And I can see you aren't ready yet, let's try something else to train you. You'll have to fight me."
The old man turned around and took of his orange cloth leaving nothing but a white sort of underwear. His muscles could be better seen like that. Isuma started to focus in a strange position, bending both knees a bit, and sticking his elbows to his waist. His body literally started to turn blue. His veins started to take a strange blue color and his aura could be felt even by Hiroko. This wasn't something a normal human could do. After a few seconds, his eyes also turned blue. He then stood normal and faced Hiroko with the palm of his hand pointing at his monkey child.
"I won't hold back, so you must attack me as fiercely as you can... Actually... I'll let you hit me once, just to let you see the real power of this technique."
The man changed his position to a normal one. He just stood with both arms relaxed and facing the ground. Hiroko knew the man was serious, and without thinking twice, he dashed towards the old man to land a powerful kick. Hiroko dashed about 5 meters in blink of an eye and threw a punch towards the man in front of him. The punch landed directly in the man's stomach, but he didn't move. Instead, a powerful force moved from the blow, cracking the lifeless ground below them in a area of about 5 meters. The old man looked down since he was now taller than Hiroko, and landed a strong punch at Hiroko's stomach. At first, Hiroko didn't even move, the attack was a spiritual punch able to damage Hiroko's spirit instead of his physical body. After a few seconds, Hiroko fell to the ground without being able to move.
"You have to focus Hiroko, focus."
Isuma took Hiroko from his neck and elevated his weak body. Isuma then threw Hiroko 10 meters away from his position, aiming directly to a stone wall and cracking it with no real effort. Hiroko landed on the ground on his 4 extremities to be able to hold on. He slowly stood up and saw the man in front of him. This technique was indeed powerful, and Hiroko wanted to release it.
"I'll do my best Isu-San! I can do this!"
Hiroko shouted with the strength he had left from the mighty blow. And a fe seconds later, facing down with his 4 extremities holding his body, his eyes started to turn blue until they gained a very strong color. He looked up, and in a matter of seconds, his strength was recovered. He stood again like nothing had happened, that was the first stage of the sage mode. The monk changed his expression for a huge smile, and a few moments after that, Hiroko dashed in a blink of an eye to the monks position trying to land a punch. The monk knew this attack could maybe deal some damage to him, so he instead blocked it with his hand. The blow was strong enough to create a crater below them. Hiroko attempted another attack by swiftly moving his leg trying to kick the old man's left arm, the one in it's normal position. Just before the attack landed, the monk disappeared, and without even being able to see the attack, Hiroko was attacked from above, throwing him to the ground and smashing him against the already made crater. His blue eyes changed again to his normal eyes, the sage mode was finishing, and Hiroko was losing his conscience.
"You did well, this is another huge step to mastering the technique."
The monk was now in his normal form, and it was everything Hiroko could see before he closed his eyes and fell asleep. His body was highly damaged. He had been training a lot, and he had finally gotten to open the first stage of his new technique. The one which would give him the power to be recognized by the world and take his captain for glory and power.
well, as mentioned by others, grammar/spelling problem. The Role Play sample you provided, although interesting to read, wasn't what was requested from Azure Snow. She requested that every players to provide a 500 word RP sample of how you will act as the position selected. Meaning, how will you RP as one of Supernova. The RP sample you provided was more towards personal development than what was asked for.
Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. - First, you stated that you are not in the crew, yet, here you are stating that your priority is to get your captain to the top. Second, although I admire the aspect that you want to get stronger for someone's sake, I have read numerous reasons similar to yours. I, however, do understand that there are some difficulty in coming up with good reasons why you are a good candidate for one of the spot in the Supernova field. Being said, I do like to see some other reasons why you believe you deserve to be one of the Supernovas.
I do hope to see you to be one of the Supernovas, or to achieve higher rank later on. Anyways, thank you again for your application, however, I believe you need little extra work.
Well, as mentioned by others, grammar/spelling problem. The Role Play sample you provided, although interesting to read, wasn't what was requested from Azure Snow. She requested that every players to provide a 500 word RP sample of how you will act as the position selected. Meaning, how will you RP as one of Supernova. The RP sample you provided was more towards personal development than what was asked for.
Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. - First, you stated that you are not in the crew, yet, here you are stating that your priority is to get your captain to the top. Second, although I admire the aspect that you want to get stronger for someone's sake, I have read numerous reasons similar to yours. I, however, do understand that there are some difficulty in coming up with good reasons why you are a good candidate for one of the spot in the Supernova field. Being said, I do like to see some other reasons why you believe you deserve to be one of the Supernovas.
I do hope to see you to be one of the Supernovas, or to achieve higher rank later on. Anyways, thank you again for your application, however, I believe you need little extra work.
Well, just to clarify this, my crew hasn't been done yet because we still don't know the name or information, but having Nine the conqueror to be my captain is a fact as well as having me be the first mate. Anyway, something else I just want to make sure, do I have to add a why to my application? I mean, is that not enough? Because that's basically everything my character wants besides traveling and having adventures, so if I really need another why, I don't think I should take the position. Sticking to my character is the number one priority after all
The reasoning of "why" in the application extends not only to the characteristics of your character and whether they are worthy of the title, but the accomplishments they garner which leads to their notoriety. Granted, being that this site is still newly conceived, there are few available opportunities to present actions that would enable a pirate to call themselves a "Supernova", but that's not the only thing the "why" section concerns. There's also the OOC aspect of it all. Surely, IC reasons and development is necessary to gain any sort of World Position, which has been provided minimally. But what has not been provided is reasoning as to why you, of all the other members on the site, should gain access to a Supernova slot. Not just whether or not the character is adequate for the position, but whether the player controlling the character is as well.
Crew: N/A (WIP) Position: Supernova Tier: Tier 1 Activity: I log athleast a minimum of 2 times per day since it became a force of habit to check what's new on the site. Why: I feel like this is a good way to expand the story for my character, He tries to make a name for himself but not many people take him to serious cause of his age and looks so I feel like I should twist a things up. I like to RP but I admit I haven't RP'd in months so I might be a little rusty doing so and I don't mind if this doesn't get accepted but i'll give it a shot anyways. Sample:
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It was a typical night in the east blue, most people already went to their houses to call it a day. However a pirate boy still wandered the streets. He passed through a shop on his way to the docks but as he was walking he heard yelling within an alley, He peeked through to see what was happening. He saw an injured woman lying on the floor she had short brown hair and she was presumably in her late 20's, He looked infront of her and he saw 2 men robbing her. He decided to walk out and help the woman. On his way to her the robbers looked at him "Hey kid, you lost your mommy? Boys like you shouldn't be awake at this time you might get grounded!" They started laughing at the comment. While the robbers laughed the boy he knelt down next to the woman and gave her a box with some bandages and medications "Take this and go somewhere you can take care of these wounds safely" The woman looked at him, although she was still frightened she manage to get a hold of herself and nodded she then stood up and proceeded to run away.
The robbers snapped and yelled at the woman "Stop right there!" but before they knew it she already ran off from their sight. The robbers glared at the Kid who was walking away without a care in the world "Kid do you know what you just did?" one of the robbers yelled at him. He stopped and responded You're annoying keep it down people are sleeping." The response only angered them more. One of the robbers runned to him and placed his hand on the boy's shoulder "You're going to pay for what you just did boy!" the boy looked back at him "I told you to keep it down, you're going to wake up someone with that tone of yours.".The robber took out a pistol and pointed it at the boy "Kid you finally got on my last nerve, this was only a simple robbery but you forced me to turn it into a murder!" The robber shot the boy in the chest and walked away laughing "You should've stayed home kid then none of this would've happened!". Just then a piece of paper flew next to the robber who decided to stay back. He grabbed the paper and started reading it, then he called out to his boss to come and take a look at it.
"What is it you want you want to show me this time?" he grabbed the paper out of a the other robber's hand a started reading it. "Oh my my my! what is a little runt like him carrying such a high bounty. This might be the easiest attempt on earning beli i've ever done!" he looked back at his partner and yelled "Why are you still standing there? grab the body and take it with us!" The other robber nodded and started walking towards the body. As the robber went to grab the body he stood in shock to see that the boy was still standing there unharmed. The arm of the boy began to form into a bigger more rocky one. The robber looked at it in fear but before he could react the boy plunged his fist into the robber's face leaving the him unconscious. "What the...!" The robber looked behind him only to see a huge cloud of smoke, as it cleared off the robber saw the boy crushing his partner's head into the floor with his large rock-like fist. The robber stared at him and asked "Just what are you kid?", The boy looked up and replied to the robber "Im the Doctor."
my official verdict on your application is more or less: pending. I had a bit of trouble reading your sample, but that was mainly due to punctuation and the occasional confusion on what a sentence meant based on the placement and definition of words. The combination of these two main factors lead me to come at a sort of impasse, unknown to whether you used some words wrong, or some other issue concerning the placement or conjunction of colloquial phrases. In truth, I enjoyed reading your sample, and took appreciation in the fact that it wasn't one concerning the rowdy actions of the typical pirate, fighting in taverns and bars against significantly less poweful ruffians and marines, 1v##. Now, despite that, I didn't gain much insight into how your character acts as a Supernova.
It appreciably revolved around the characters that acted not as "characters", but "people"; a post I highly respect for that fact. It focused on subjects outside the mainstream, and executed them fluidly timeline-wise. But, the question still begs, "is Phoenix D. Jack suitable as a supernova?" And the answer? It still hasn't been found. So, instead what I'll ask of you, as opposed to outright denying the application, is ask that you give a short sample that's moreso about Jack being a supernova than a person. No need to meet the 500 word requirement this time. I'd love to approve this sample, in fact; it's just that I don't really see how it conveys that this character is of Supernova propriety.
VERDICT ON HEARTSMITH
So, all in all I'm just gonna go ahead and say that this sample gets my approval. Keep in mind, this is only the first approval. You'll still need a second one to gain the full "go-ahead" on becoming a Supernova. As for my reasoning why, similarly to Jack's post there was some difficulty in reading the post due to punctuation, but grammatically speaking that was the only fault I saw. The post was devoid of any overly embellished words that flaunted a wide vocabulary, and for that it made the reading process loads easier, and the flow of the words far smoother.
Now, admittedly I thought this was going to be a pretty standard sample where the character confronts some horribly weaker opponents and displays an overwhelming gap between their power. As it turns out, that's exactly what happened, but it wasn't bad. With fluidity of the post allowed for me to imagine the scene playing as if it were an actual anime, and the placement of a victim made it all the more vivid. The actions taken were fairly pleasing, along with the introduction of your character's bounty, albeit random in its appearance. What I liked was the fact that they didn't altogether express fear from the number of the bounty, but instead scoffed at the deceitful ease of money they could have gained. Again, the ignorance of the opponents was another cliche, but it wasn't executed badly, and for that I give this sample my clear. I'll leave it to the next person to determine--in the event that they approve you as well--the bounty and level you get.
Phoenix D. Jack
Position : 4th:Supernova Berries : 15,700,000 Posts : 57
Subject: Re: Pirate Positions Registration Sat Jul 11, 2015 3:00 am
So posting to address the ways Jack will be acting as a supernova, you said you wanted a sample though I'll be making an explanation, since I have a lack of time right now, if it doesn't suffice then I'll make a sample when I get back. Though first I'll address the things you wrote about my sample, first is the understanding of my sample, well I'd like o say sorry, I might have written some things wrong, not sure. Either way I'm not good at writing solo's and it shows I admit that,just as I wrote in my reasoning my forte is writing with others, secondly. You said that there was no show of how Jack acts as a Supernova though I beg you to differ. First of no there is not signs of how he acts when he fights but that is more so a reason since Jack isn't' as much of a fighter as many are, and it was for ha reason I choose o show a sample of a scene without fights, I mean he is a cook apteral. So what supernova things did he do, or well maybe not so much a supernova thing perhaps just a person with a high bounty, but he two hings are kind the same. Anyway on to he key things my sample acually did express about Jack. First is ha while he is known as a ruthless villain as all Pirates are he is also known as a great cook, so great that people knowing the bounty would raher have him cook for them rather than hoping to get a piece of the bounty. That he uses Intimidation to get what he wants, as his bounty allows him to do, and that if all things go wrong show a display of power, mainly being the fruit his has eaten. Lastly and perhaps one of he key differences he has compared to many other supernova's even Pirates is that he has no actual hatred towards he marines, more than that, he has no problem befriending them. While no there was no actual example of him befriending a new person, there was a hinting that he would. If the marine isn't some douche who can only see black and white no matter how much you prove to them otherwise. This might seem like a small thing, but in a place of power this creates some interesting roleplay, that differs from if he had just become a Warlord. The reasoning behind why his bounty has grown and he has become a renown supernova is cause of two things. He has a crazy strong fruit that allows him to do incredible things even if he isn't the type to do such things. Misunderstanding with black and white marines, some he pissed off for simply continuing to "deny" that he isn't suited for the pirate life etc.
Now as far as things not explained about Jack, I can do some explaining, though perhaps I misunderstood the sample. I don't know if what you want is for me to write a sample of Jack doing Supernova'ish things or if you wanted a sample of how Jack would be as a Supernova since if the first case is true then perhaps Jack shouldn't be a supernova because he'll by far not be as other supernova's are, its just nothow Jack is. He can be arrogant but not to the lengths of what another supernova would be, but I don't think a supernova has to be. His way of being more or less wont change, except that he'll use the power given in reputation that makes people fear him, or in other cases admire him, and he embraces that fact. He wont be ruthless though pissing of the marines makes the marines pin blame onto him just for having been near so he'll be spoken of as a villain through and through. Though he wont be a ruthless type, in most cases he'll grant most people a fair chance to give him the impression they want not the impression their reputation have given them, he'd even be inclined to save people he didn't have to.
A last point I'd like to point out, which perhaps is a small one is that Jack adores the female gender, he loves making them happy, which is the reasoning behind being named gallant. He isn't so star struck that any woman would be able to ask anything of him and expect him to obey, though he'll have a though time saying no to any pretty face should the request be somewhat reasonable.
Destiny
Position : Weaver of Fate Posts : 1533
Subject: Re: Pirate Positions Registration Sat Jul 11, 2015 8:18 am
It seems like it is your Destiny to become a Supernova.. It is a Yes from me.
Congrats, You are a Supernova.
Heartsmith wrote:
Crew: N/A (WIP) Position: Supernova Tier: Tier
Activity: I log athleast a minimum of 2 times per day since it became a force of habit to check what's new on the site. Why: I feel like this is a good way to expand the story for my character, He tries to make a name for himself but not many people take him to serious cause of his age and looks so I feel like I should twist a things up. I like to RP but I admit I haven't RP'd in months so I might be a little rusty doing so and I don't mind if this doesn't get accepted but i'll give it a shot anyways. Sample:
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It was a typical night in the east blue, most people already went to their houses to call it a day. However a pirate boy still wandered the streets. He passed through a shop on his way to the docks but as he was walking he heard yelling within an alley, He peeked through to see what was happening. He saw an injured woman lying on the floor she had short brown hair and she was presumably in her late 20's, He looked infront of her and he saw 2 men robbing her. He decided to walk out and help the woman. On his way to her the robbers looked at him "Hey kid, you lost your mommy? Boys like you shouldn't be awake at this time you might get grounded!" They started laughing at the comment. While the robbers laughed the boy he knelt down next to the woman and gave her a box with some bandages and medications "Take this and go somewhere you can take care of these wounds safely" The woman looked at him, although she was still frightened she manage to get a hold of herself and nodded she then stood up and proceeded to run away.
The robbers snapped and yelled at the woman "Stop right there!" but before they knew it she already ran off from their sight. The robbers glared at the Kid who was walking away without a care in the world "Kid do you know what you just did?" one of the robbers yelled at him. He stopped and responded You're annoying keep it down people are sleeping." The response only angered them more. One of the robbers runned to him and placed his hand on the boy's shoulder "You're going to pay for what you just did boy!" the boy looked back at him "I told you to keep it down, you're going to wake up someone with that tone of yours.".The robber took out a pistol and pointed it at the boy "Kid you finally got on my last nerve, this was only a simple robbery but you forced me to turn it into a murder!" The robber shot the boy in the chest and walked away laughing "You should've stayed home kid then none of this would've happened!". Just then a piece of paper flew next to the robber who decided to stay back. He grabbed the paper and started reading it, then he called out to his boss to come and take a look at it.
"What is it you want you want to show me this time?" he grabbed the paper out of a the other robber's hand a started reading it. "Oh my my my! what is a little runt like him carrying such a high bounty. This might be the easiest attempt on earning beli i've ever done!" he looked back at his partner and yelled "Why are you still standing there? grab the body and take it with us!" The other robber nodded and started walking towards the body. As the robber went to grab the body he stood in shock to see that the boy was still standing there unharmed. The arm of the boy began to form into a bigger more rocky one. The robber looked at it in fear but before he could react the boy plunged his fist into the robber's face leaving the him unconscious. "What the...!" The robber looked behind him only to see a huge cloud of smoke, as it cleared off the robber saw the boy crushing his partner's head into the floor with his large rock-like fist. The robber stared at him and asked "Just what are you kid?", The boy looked up and replied to the robber "Im the Doctor."
Destiny
Position : Weaver of Fate Posts : 1533
Subject: Re: Pirate Positions Registration Sat Jul 11, 2015 8:21 am
Jack, As for you, I always enjoy reading your RP Threads and seeing as Ive RPed a lot with you and know what you are capable of, It is a Yes on the Supernova Position from me. I would like to see Jack in a Supernova Showdown for your Next Sample though - I think that would be interesting. (Forced Showdown.. Show us the Powers of the Mera.)
Crew: Not yet, but it's in creation Position: Supernova Tier: 1 Activity: I'm active, and I can still be with this position. I can't really say exactly my activity, but I can indeed be here at least once a day (with some exceptions like family vacations, finals, etc of course) Why: Hiroko's first priority is to get his captain to the top and to help as much as he can. He has to get stronger and stronger just for that, and because of that huge power he looks like, his quick growth as a 9 year old and his strange physical appearance have gained him some fame. Also, maybe after reading the other apps I don't feel like a very experienced rper. I've been rping for about 2 years already, maybe even less, but I like it and I keep trying hard, and in my opinion improving. I also have proven my activity here since I've been here since almost the very start and haven't left like others have. I've tried to help the best I can and still will help as I can. Sample:
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"Keep running, it's getting closer." Shouted a bandit as he ran through the jugnle with his group. About 5 bandits carrie huge bags as they ran trying to lose the one thing trying to catch them. They couldn't even see him, but he was already like a legend in that area, it was his after all. The bandits kept running, but it was Hiroko who was just playing with them a while. They had to finally stop after seeing the huge monkey land in front of them with his pole in his tale. He gave a step forward, creating some fear in the enemies.
"What are you? Why are you trying to catch us? Just let us go you stupid ape."
One of the bandits shouted at Hiroko. They had some sort of a half moon position in front of Hiroko. They didn't want to give away all the money they got, but they really didn't they could all survive in a fight against Hiroko. They knew he was strong enough to crush some of them in the fight, but they were completely wrong. If they fought, non of them would survive.
"How did you just call me? I'm Hiroko, not just a stupid ape. And why am I following you? That money you have there, that's mine. This is my territory, and nobody steals from me."
Hiroko said as he moved slowly towards the man who called him a stupid ape. He then took the man from the neck and elevated him about 1 meter from the ground. He then used his right fist, the one he wasn't using, to punch the bandit in the stomach and send him flying to crash against a tree behind them. The bag fell to the ground without being launched with the man. From the black bag, a huge amount of golden coins fell to the ground.
"So, you do have my money. I think I'll take it back now, I mean, if you don't mind."
The other men started to shout and took out their guns. Each of them had at least one gun, but two of the four bandits still alive had a pair of guns instead of just one. They started to shoot at the monkey, but Hiroko was too fast for them and quickly jumped in his feet point towards a tree above them. As he moved, the bandits freaked out without being able to see anything but a shadow moving quickly from tree to tree. In attempt to kill the pirate, all the bandits started to waist their ammo trying to shoot the moving shadow, but it was useless, they were in Hiroko's natural terrain, he was in a huge advantage. When the guns ran out of ammo, the bandits freaked even more and threw their guns at the ground, pulling out swords instead.
"That's useless, I feel sorry for all of you, but since you didn't give me my money when I told you, you'll have to pay for it."
Hiroko then quickly dashed towards one in the corner of their formation and punched him hard enough to break the tree behind them and make it fall on him, ending the life of another bandit. Hiroko was fast enough to attack that man and hide in the jungle once again. He then did the same thing with another bandit, this time landing a kick and breaking most of his bones in the process. With his swift moves in the jungle, it was impossible for the bandits to actually see him moving.
"Please, we have a family, don't kill us, we'll give you your money."
One of the two remaining bandits started to shout in attempt to save his life. But Before he could continue looking for an opportunity to change Hiroko's mind, the huge ape fell on top of the man with his feet and crushed him ending his life in an instant. There was only one left now, only one bandit looking at Hiroko. The bandit quickly dropped the bag and started to cry for help. With each step, the bandit fell and crawled each time faster, but it wasn't enough to escape from Hiroko. The monkey took the man from his back and grabbed his shirt, pulling him and elevating him enough to see him directly to his face.
"I won't kill you, but you have to learn to respect a supernova."
Hiroko dropped the man in his feet and saw how the man quickly ran t save himself. Hiroko always left at least one survivor, that way everyone could know about him. It was the only way to have the respect of the people. Fear was something he created with his name, it wasn't hard to do it anyway,
Crew: N/A Position: SuperNova Tier: 1 Activity: I can be as active as necessary, I can be on daily even. However, my only exception is that I have other websites that and a job that requires u attention as well but other than that, I think I can be pretty active. I understand that I have not been very active as of late but that was mainly because RL kept me busy and I was waiting on my character to be approved. Anyways, I will be more active if I have people to RP with and have the position of course jk Why: I have been RPing since late 2011 or early 2012, and overtime have developed a good RP style. While I'm VERY new to this forum, I have been on my fair share of RP sites and I think I could do a lot of interesting topics if I had the supernova position. Sample:
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Tymee Alpha
Berries : 500,000 Posts : 89 Skill Sheet Skill 1: Hie Hie no Mi Skill 2: Reitō arechi no burēdo Skill 3:
Crew: N/A Position: Supernova Tier: 1 Activity: I log on every day but no one else is on so I leave, though that is a testament to just timing I suppose. I can get on most of the time, most of the week, depends on if I am working or not. But even on days I work I can still log in even if its late at night or right in the morning. Whatever the case due to this site being of someone I quite enjoy, I can make time for it. Why: Been role-playing since the days of AOL's glory and the height of myspace groups. Got my start in early 2003, have been role-playing ever since. I like the idea of being a Shichibukai more than I do a Supernova, however due to IC musing I think Supernova is a good place to start off on this site. I like the entire concept of it at least, as it shows the top people of a generation. My character's main draw is their gender ambiguity. If you heard her voice she seems like a man. If you asked her about her past she says that she was and still is a 40 something year old man. She is often referred to by the female pronoun, but is ultimately male. I think that with her knowledge, her violent tendencies, and the comedic moments I tend to write as a rper, she would make a good supernova, especially given how people don't know if he is male or if she is female. [Besides, diversity ftw.] Sample:
Mature Language, Mature Themes:
In silk bathed in the epitome of blackest midnight stood a figure of imposing breadth. Eyes of infinite blue like the depths of the fathomless ocean, here the juggernaut stood with arms politely tucked underneath a sizable bosom. In an outfit similar to a marines, yet jet black in it's color, the woman reached upwards and tipped her officer's cap. Looking down on a man who shared a similar occupation to her, a rival pirate by the name of Florence J. Atterwick "The Crusty". He wasn't the kind of pirate who took it easy on those who got in his way, and Alpha was doing a pretty good job of doing just that. Five men stood behind her, a burly bunch of cutthroats and brigands, smilingly wildly and attempting their hardest to look absolutely intimidating. It was a stand off, so those ten across from her attempted the same, behind their own captain, Florence. He was a rather disgusting looking man with dirty beaded dreadlocks, a rough braided beard, and a hair riddled pot belly. They stood at the top of a cliff outside of a small village, the booty here was impressive, and that does directly apply to Tymee.
"So they allow any pretty little thing to be a Supernova now-a-days huh?? Tsk, Taicho, don't hurt her too bad haha, she has to look good for later." Random fodder number one exclaimed from behind his captain on the right side.
"T-that is the notorious Super Rookie, Alpha Tymee??! Holy balls she is hawt! Boss...be..careful...but...buut...Yeah! Yeah! Boss, don't go ruining such a beautiful woman! You can do it!" Soon to be dead number two stated directly afterwards.
"This is your last chance, Alpha. Join the crew or be butchered like the bitch you are. I wasn't able to become a Supernova because you fucking injured me on Battery Island! Well no more, it's time for you to learn your place, i'll show the world your'e not worthy of having the title of Super Rookie!" He rubbed his belly with his free hand as he rose a rather fat gourd of wine to his lips, allowing the cool liquid to sprint down his throat rather swiftly.
Tymee tilted her head, surprised that someone would be this persistent in attempting to get her to betray that whom she already found worthy of bending the knee to. She sighed softly as she flicked the large fur over-coat off her body, which one of her crew-mates caught immediately. It was true that Tymee was considered by many outside of her crew to be a mute, and she had respectfully declined this man's advances numerous times in the past, but it seemed that on this day their interests intertwined. He wanted the treasure that was in the village, she wanted the treasure that was in the village. She had already proven to the world that she was a Supernova, and yet she was not being taken seriously.
"Good, you're already presenting!" He laughed aloud with thunderous cheer from his men.
He wasn't underestimating Tymee of course, he had beaten her twice in the past and figured himself her equal. But that was four years ago. Four years before Tymee joined on with another and found herself sky-rocketing to fame. His ignorance of her newly acquired abilities was...laughable at best. He wasn't aware that she was now a logia user, that she had earned the title of Supernova because she had committed more heinous acts in her fits of rage than more than half of the other Supernova around. She wasn't a Super Rookie simply because she was a former marine, she wasn't a Super Rookie because she was pretty and had people willing to fight for her. She was a Supernova because she was Jezebel in human form. Her temper had gown and her tolerance decreased drastically over the years.
"The fuck you say?" A voice rang outwards that was deep, grizzled, almost Russian in dialect.
Immediately the crew opposite her felt their hearts sink, as if all of their arousal deteriorated in a matter of seconds. It seemed to function as an excellent method of confusion. Typically, whenever Alpha communicated with the outside world she whispered into the ear of a crew-mate who relayed her orders to those not in the crew. But it seemed that a great deal of confidence wormed itself inside of her since those long four years had passed. Caring little for what others thought of her, she spoke with commanding authority and let that masculine voice be heard on full display.
"Are you wanting to die? Huh?? I suppose I can arrange such a thing." A voice rang outwards that was deep, grizzled, almost Russian in dialect.
Murmuring quickly ensued as the villainous crew cried outwards cursing the heavens, making jabs and comments that caused Tymee to feel a twitch in her left eye. Things such as 'I can't believe that it's a grown man!' and 'I was deceived by the gods, this grotesque sow is no woman!' Though she appreciated that they didn't think of her in such ways...the level of disgust they displayed had only caused Tymee to descend into the plains of unbridled ferocity. Her hand slowly reached down towards her katana, the wicked sword Bandersnatch, and she drew it immediately, kicking off her foot and swinging the blade with such follow through that it cleanly passed through the hand of the Captain which held his grog. Now severed she looked down sealing the blade back inside of it's sheath. Standing upright and reaching out with the palm of her hand to grab the screaming captain's face. A slow, crippling death soon followed as he found himself freezing into what appeared to be a solid ice sculpture. Cold vacant eyes peered at his crew, and Tymee spoke elegantly.
"You have two choices, you will bend the knee to me and serve respectfully, or you will die here. The choice is your own." It could be seen that a pure abyss of seething hatred emanated from her eyes, she squeezed down with the same hand used to grip the captain's face and shattered his head completely.
Having used most if not all her energy to do so, it wasn't obvious to those before her. The pirates had only mere moments to choose, although, it would be unfair to say they had a choice. As each one silently took the knee, lowering themselves due to to her overbearing skill in both ability and blade, the female warrior looked upwards at the sky and extended her hands outwards. As if welcoming the flock of abandoned souls into her bosom, she only needed to show one display of power to cause this riff raff to cower. It was funny in her mind however, she was sent here to form a temporary alliance with this crew so that they wouldn't keep stalking them across the Grand Line while they were down here gathering supplies, it was quite interesting because Tymee knew all along that the main goal was to secure the group's allegiance but actively chose to go against this method. Hearing about the treasure from a lady in the village she actively sought out the caches whereabouts and caused this clash unnecessarily. Oh well, she at least managed to do better than an alliance, if they got a second crew out there representing them that would consolidate power. A cadet branch of the crew if you will.
"You all have aspirations to enter the new world and yet you followed that weak insignificant spec of a living creature. Such arrogance is unfathomable. You now all serve me and my captain, your unwavering loyalty will be rewarded a hundred fold when she sits upon the throne as the Queen of Pirates. You think I'm an oddity, you've seen nothing yet. Stuck in paradise barely able to wipe your own asses. Ha! You, green hair. You're the first mate of your crew right? Now you're the captain, you represent our crew now. Remember that. When the time comes I shall return for you all and bring you to the new world, then you will see what insanity this world really has to offer." She seemed convincing enough, being someone who had once been an intriguer, she was good with words and the pretty smile on her face couldn't do anything but help the cause.
I like the scene you played out and everything but there is one thing that bugs me greatly and that is Flowing in Sentences, Grammar, and Spelling. I think you need to work on those Three things. Im sure you will get better as time goes on but for now I have to Deny Access to such a powerful Title at this time. Once your RP's gain the things discussed we shall then see another RP Sample and go from there..
Aika Seiren
I shall Await your Sample.
Tymee Alpha
I enjoyed your RP Sample quite a lot. I think that the Fruit you have chosen is perfect for your character (Even your FC uses Ice in the anime - so thats cool. ) Its an absolute Pleasure to give you the Title of Super Nova and a 187,400,000 Beli Bounty. Your Level has been boosted 26 Levels. You are now able to Roll of Soul Jewel (Level 5) ~ Cant wait to see what you do on the RP.