God's Angels: Summon magic 2nd skill set

Subject: God's Angels: Summon magic 2nd skill set Wed Feb 22, 2017 6:16 pm

Skill Set Name: God's Angels: Summon magic.
Elemental Property: Dark and light.
Stat Specialization: Defensive Offensive Healing

Skill Set Information: Summon based magic, the user summon creatures to do his bidden. The user forms contracts with whom ever which in turn gives the user their loyal aid. They will follow his orders til death or the contract is broken.

Passive: The user is able to form contracts with any being. Such as high ranking demons or angelic beings.

The user is able to force or trick beings into his contract if that are caught unaware.

The user gets stronger with each new contract allowing him to borrow one move from them.

Skill Set Strengths: The user could summon powerful beings to weaker ones to aid him.

Each summon is different with different skills.

He is able to summon more than one being if it's The same thing and rank counting it as 1 summon still.

Skill Set Weakness: The user summons can only remain in this world if he has above 1/4 of his health.

Each summon has a different rank which means higher tear pc and npc could end them.

The summons could end their contract with him if They find him unworthy.

Technique Name: Unbreakable bonds
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus N/A
Technique's Duration 1
Technique Description: The user creates a contract with a being. If it agrees it will become his loyal ally.

Technique Name: God's Angel: Summon
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus Attack Defensive Healing and Speed
Technique's Duration 10 post or til destroyed cool down time 1 post.
Technique Description: The user summons one of his contracts into play. Which than summon him a being to aid him.

Demon Snake low tier- attacks the user like a basic snake.
Attack 30
Defense 10
Hp 25
Speed 35

Demon grunt low tier uses claws and fangs
Attack 50
Defense N/A
Hp 10
Speed 40

Black wing eagle low tier could fly and uses it's beak and claws.
Attack 30
Defense 10
Hp 10
Speed 50

Hobb Goblins low tier (3) uses their spear.
Attack 60
Defense 10
Hp10
Speed 20

Healing bell fairy low tier Heals the user 10 Hp per post.
Attack
Defense
Hp 30
Speed 70

Technique Name: By law your mines
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus N/A
Technique's Duration 1 post
Technique Description: If the user shows this to his targets there will be a 50% more of a chance they will make a contract with the user.

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Subject: Re: God's Angels: Summon magic 2nd skill set Wed Feb 22, 2017 6:42 pm

right this is my twilight art summon redone because I was told I had to redo it

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Prankster wrote:: Skill Set Name: God's Angels: Summon magic.
Elemental Property: Dark and light.
Stat Specialization: Defensive Offensive Healing

Skill Set Information: [bSummon based magic, the user summon creatures to do his bidden. The user forms contracts with whom ever which in turn gives the user their loyal aid. They will follow his orders til death or the contract is broken.[/b]
No. I want you to reword this a bit. You cannot summon contracts with everything, at any strength. They will be your rank, and this will be done through skills. You cannot form contracts with anything IC, and the only things you can summon will be from this skillset and specific. You can also not summon PC characters. Reword it to meet my standards.

Passive: The user is able to form contracts with any being. Such as high ranking demons or angelic beings.
This goes with what I was talking about above. No "High ranking demon" or "Angelic beings" will form contracts with you just because. Remove this altogether. Your "contracts" will just be things you make on this skill set.

The user is able to force or trick beings into his contract if that are caught unaware.
This doesn't make any sense. Either way this sounds like a big no, so I recommend changing it unless you think you can balance it to get by my standards.

The user gets stronger with each new contract allowing him to borrow one move from them.
I don't like this anymore. Especially considering your summons shouldn't even have skills, so no.

Skill Set Strengths: The user could summon powerful beings to weaker ones to aid him.
As above, only the ones listed on the skillset will apply.

Each summon is different with different skills.
No skills.

He is able to summon more than one being if it's The same thing and rank counting it as 1 summon still.
No more than 2 summoning. Pandora's God Blessing counts, so if you summon both of those you cannot summon any here. This counts with Lineages as well. You can try to get another mod to overrule me here.

Skill Set Weakness: The user summons can only remain in this world if he has above 1/4 of his health.

Each summon has a different rank which means higher tear pc and npc could end them.
This isn't a weakness. It's an obvious.

The summons could end their contract with him if They find him unworthy.
A. This isn't how contracts work.
B. No, these summons are entirely written and played as by you. This isn't a weakness.

Technique Name: Unbreakable bonds
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus N/A
Technique's Duration 1
Technique Description: The user creates a contract with a being. If it agrees it will become his loyal ally.
This will be unnecessary. We are going to redo most of your skills to be specific summons, as to avoid any vague.

Technique Name: God's Angel: Summon
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus Attack Defensive Healing and Speed
Technique's Duration 10 post or til destroyed cool down time 1 post.
Technique Description: The user summons one of his contracts into play. Which than summon him a being to aid him.

Demon Snake low tier- attacks the user like a basic snake.
Attack 30
Defense 10
Hp 25
Speed 35

Demon grunt low tier uses claws and fangs
Attack 50
Defense N/A
Hp 10
Speed 40

Black wing eagle low tier could fly and uses it's beak and claws.
Attack 30
Defense 10
Hp 10
Speed 50

Hobb Goblins low tier (3) uses their spear.
Attack 60
Defense 10
Hp10
Speed 20

Healing bell fairy low tier Heals the user 10 Hp per post.
Attack
Defense
Hp 30
Speed 70

Go ahead and redo this, add levels to the creates. They will scale with yours. You can have 1/4th of your total stats, at all times, to distribute to your summons. What I'd like to do, to make your skillset a little better, less cluttered, more viable, and a whole lot less vague, is to make each summon an actual skill. Otherwise we'll probably be here for a while.

Technique Name: By law your mines
Technique Rank D
Technique Focus N/A
Technique's Duration 1 post
Technique Description: If the user shows this to his targets there will be a 50% more of a chance they will make a contract with the user.
This doesn't make any sense. There's no likeliness mechanic mentioned anywhere else throughout your entire skillset, so why do you randomly have a +50% in likeliness for them to join you? Unless you rework the entirety of the skillset, this is just entirely cosmetic, as, once again, every summon/being you are trying to form a contract with will more than likely be played as you. You will not have the ability to steal away someone else's NPC or PC character and form a contract with them.

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Grader's note: I'm trying to rework this a bit to make it easier, on everyone, in a sense of most of this being vague, over/underpowered, not very viable, and completely unnecessary. Feel free to get a second opinion if you want on my work.

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Subject: Re: God's Angels: Summon magic 2nd skill set Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:33 pm

welp I tried time for faze 3 rock out and delete this ill start a new

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